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2021年3月13日托福独立写作真题范文 | 关于健康问题

发布时间:2021-03-16 关键词:

摘要:Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Nowadays it is easier to maintain good health than it was in the past.

        2021年3月(yue)13日托福(fu)独(du)立写作

  【考场题(ti)目回忆】:

  Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?

  Nowadays it is easier to maintain good health than it was in the past.

  【写作思路】

  经典的(de)(de)今昔对(dui)比题。所(suo)以写作过(guo)程中应凸显“对(dui)比”。这是(shi)贯穿全(quan)文(wen)的(de)(de)主线。同时,题目中的(de)(de)good health是(shi)一个宽泛的(de)(de)概念,所(suo)以考生可以通(tong)过(guo)细分(fen)成诸多方面展开写作,于是(shi)文(wen)章的(de)(de)结构(gou)就就很清晰。

  本篇(pian)观点为(wei)(wei)“不(bu)同(tong)意statement,持相反观点,也就(jiu)是认为(wei)(wei)现(xian)在并不(bu)比过去更容易(yi)保持健康(kang)”。第一、二(er)段(duan)作者阐述饮食条件和医疗条件进步,看似(si)同(tong)意题设(she)观点。第二(er)段(duan)尾句却给(ji)了读者一个大(da)反转。第三、四段(duan)论(lun)述生活(huo)方式,包括时间、压力、锻炼等(deng)因(yin)素,给(ji)当代人带(dai)来的“危机”,从而论(lun)证其实过去更容易(yi)保持健康(kang)。

  Decades ago, many parts of the world suffered famine and hunger(饥(ji)荒), and in some of the places, it is only recently that people are fed. Decades ago, the variety of foods on an average Chinese household’s dining table was fairly poor; compared with the old times, the Chinese now can choose from a great range. In the western world, foods used to be filled with sugar and salt, and the trend of eating lightly(轻食潮流) is nowprevailing(流行(xing)). In terms of nourishment and diet the time haswitnessed (见(jian)证)shifts — from having none to having some, from monotony to diversity, from indulgence to abstinence.

  【本段(duan)解析】

  由三组今昔对(dui)比排比直(zhi)接回应题(ti)(ti)目,尤其是(shi)在总结的那一(yi)句对(dui)应了前文的排比。整个段落即是(shi)introduction引出话题(ti)(ti),也阐述了当代的生活条(tiao)件(jian)在两个重要的方面确(que)实(shi)比过去(qu)更好。

  Also, with good dietary supplements and medical service, people’s health increases: there have been all sorts of pills as complements to our bodily needs that foods alone cannot meet; and improved medical treating methods and medications help to reduce illnesses and to defeat diseases. These are the privileges(特权) those past generations did not have. Yet, food, nutrition and healthcare constitute (组成)only one part of the whole picture.

  【本(ben)段解析】

  本段(duan)对第(di)一(yi)段(duan)进(jin)行(xing)补充:除了饮(yin)食(shi)(shi)和营(ying)养方面的进(jin)步(bu),还有医(yi)(yi)疗条(tiao)(tiao)(tiao)件(jian)(jian)的进(jin)步(bu)。至此,第(di)一(yi)、二段(duan)看似作(zuo)者同意题设观(guan)点,实则为让步(bu)段(duan)。第(di)二段(duan)结尾(wei)作(zuo)者用“Yet”给了读者一(yi)个大(da)反转(zhuan):虽然饮(yin)食(shi)(shi)条(tiao)(tiao)(tiao)件(jian)(jian)和医(yi)(yi)疗条(tiao)(tiao)(tiao)件(jian)(jian)有所(suo)进(jin)步(bu),但是(shi)这只能作(zuo)为我(wo)们考量的一(yi)小部分。

  The other major aspect is lifestyle, including one’s timetable, stress, exercise, as well as consumption of alcohol and tobacco. Compared with my grandfather in his thirties and forties, my father, when he was the same age, had a busier schedule. Today, as I am in my heyday of career, I hardly have high-quality private time. Seldom can I be actually offline outside office hours; seldom can I sleep in on my days off; seldom can I take my time to enjoy a good cup of coffee on a Saturday afternoon.【划线部分是举例(li)也是通过举例(li)做对比,一(yi)石二鸟,一(yi)举两得(de)。】All of these makes it less easy to keep fit and calm today than in the past, and in fact it is difficult to do so. What ensues from the out-of-control timetable is my high stress level,rendering(导(dao)致) me constantly alerted and nervous(精神(shen)的持续性紧张). I believe this is not only my case but the case of many people of my age, and unlike our generation, the older generations were never in such a strained state. This is another reason why keeping healthy is less easy today.

  【本段解析】

  本(ben)段(duan)的(de)(de)(de)主(zhu)(zhu)旨为:生活(huo)方(fang)式(shi)也是影响健(jian)康(kang)的(de)(de)(de)主(zhu)(zhu)要因素之一。本(ben)段(duan)占了全(quan)文较大的(de)(de)(de)篇幅,是讨论的(de)(de)(de)重点之一。通过举例论证(zheng)的(de)(de)(de)手法(fa)对比了祖父辈(bei)、父辈(bei)、到自(zi)己这一代(dai)在(zai)日(ri)程、压力及生活(huo)作息等(deng)方(fang)面,阐(chan)述了“现在(zai)的(de)(de)(de)人其实不(bu)容易保持健(jian)康(kang)”。

  In addition, as people today have less private time, they exercise less, and as they suffer high levels of stress, they drink and smoke. This chain effect, as a result of the poor time management, is terrifying but true, and contrasts sharply(鲜(xian)明(ming)地) with the virtuous circle(良(liang)性循环) in the past. So, there is another apparent reason to believe that it was easier to maintain good health in the past than it is today.

  【本段解析】

  进一步(bu)对上一段提出的(de)(de)观(guan)点进行(xing)深入(ru)讨论。采用说(shuo)理(li)论证,阐述不合理(li)的(de)(de)时(shi)间管理(li)、高压环境以(yi)及不健康(kang)的(de)(de)生活习惯(guan),各因素间的(de)(de)相互(hu)影响,恶性循环,都与过(guo)(guo)去(qu)形(xing)成了鲜(xian)明(ming)的(de)(de)对比。段尾再次强调过(guo)(guo)去(qu)更容(rong)易保持健康(kang)的(de)(de)观(guan)点。

  All in all, with those many factors taken into consideration, I find it hard to agree with the statement given.

  【本段解析】

  总(zong)结段言简(jian)意赅表明观点(dian),没(mei)有赘述。

  【全文语言特点】

  全文中,句(ju)法结(jie)构丰富又(you)不做作油腻,用(yong)(yong)(yong)词(ci)准确自然,偶有故意(yi)三两词(ci)点睛。没有堆砌(qi)语法现象、没过(guo)生(sheng)造长难(nan)句(ju),也没有使用(yong)(yong)(yong)生(sheng)僻(pi)晦涩的词(ci)汇,于是没有给读(du)者造成阅(yue)读(du)困难(nan)。相反(fan),作者使用(yong)(yong)(yong)了大量(liang)学生(sheng)普遍认(ren)识但未必(bi)会用(yong)(yong)(yong)的词(ci)句(ju),可读(du)性(xing)高(gao)。

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